Category: Feedback
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Mentor Feedback
Mentor Feedback 1 Mentor Feedback 2
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Complete Draft–Professor Feedback
Dear Ashton, Congratulations on finishing your rough draft! This is a huge accomplishment in itself. And getting it done on time allows you to spend the rest of the semester revising. So, great job! Notes: Typo?: “I can’t feel my toes, but I can still fell my–” It seems much clearer to me this time…
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Peer Reader Feedback–Combined
Ashton Letter 1 Dear Ashton The Homeless Patient Comments Significant Revision of Excerpt Comments Hi Ashton, Sorry, I’ve been moving into a new apartment over the past few days and I still don’t have wifi. So notes on my phone will have to do. But I like the way Dawson goes back and forth with…
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First Five Pages–Professor Feedback
Dear Ashton, Congrats on finishing the first 6 pages of “The Homeless Patient”! Since it’s so early in the process, I don’t have much in the way of criticism. But I’ll point out a few things that are really working well and a few places that were a little confusing to me. I liked Cadence…
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Outside Reader 1
Feedback from a peer, and brainstorming how to fix it She was confused on Dawson’s job. She thought he was a doctor at first. She agreed the ending was rushed. More time, such as a day, could pass for Charlie to think about what Cadence said before Darlene returns. She liked the descriptions of Darlene’s…